ease me so much that I hunger for tomorrow in the desparity of my sanguine disbelief the depraved sense of vacancy, yes I need to be eased each day brings yearning for that sanction of plight the promise that I should be eased awhile, yes no one ever told me it would be this way and I beg ease me as my hope languishes with every declining breath and today, yes I need to be eased please ease me
“Ease Me”
04 Monday Feb 2013
Posted in POETRY
I really liked this. If I had any complaints, it would be about the repetition of the word ease but even then, it just drives the point home. I enjoyed this and could feel it on a personal level. I could use some easing as well. Nicely done.
Yeah I don’t often repeat the same word over and over again so much though I do use a lot of repetition of rhythm and sound, or a repetition of phrases is a less blatant manner, but for this one, it felt necessary for some reason, perhaps like you said, it drives the point home. Thanks so much for your thoughts on it :)
My gosh your writing is incredible to me.
Thank you so much, that’s awesome of you to say! :)
I need to remind you of my adoration of your poetry. The flow to this peice screams “read me aloud!”
I think it screams “sing me!”
Very cool! You write music Hotspur?
I write it, yes. And then I talk for a year about how I need to get with my friend and record it, and then I never do. sigh
lol yeah, I know how that goes. When I was 12, a couple of friends and I formed a band. None of us could sing or play an instrument. We couldn’t read or write music. But we came up with a cool band name, and wrote song lyrics for a year. That’s as far as we got lmao
Thank you so much, and yours is quite intense, I really enjoy it. And I actually read all my poems aloud repeatedly before I post them, it helps to create the flow ;)
So lovely!
Thank you so much Cindy :)
To be filled with that sort of longing its visceral, isn’t it? Sage, again I am moved, and I draw terrific parallels with your words and my own life. That is the distinction every writer wants, and every reader longs for.
Wow that’s incredible, thanks for saying that. It does boost the pride to know that my words are so identifiable in such a variety of personal experiences by so many different readers. I appreciate that, and I’m really glad you find a connection in what I have to say :)
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Brilliance.. ~ Jen.
Thank you Jen, I appreciate that :)